Tuesday, July 21, 2009

Back to the drawing board...

I wrote a new picture book yesterday. It rocks. Or so I thought, until...

JACQUI: I want to read you this story.
TINK: Did you write it?
JACQUI: Yeah, but pretend I didn't, okay?
TINK: Okay.
JACQUI: (reads story)...The End
JACQUI: Hello?
JACQUI: What do you think? Is it good?
TINK: Sure (plays with stuffed raccoon).
JACQUI: Honest opinion. What did you like or not like?
TINK: It needs more action.
JACQUI: Okay. I can do that. What did you like?
JACQUI: Were there any funny parts?

And there you have it. Not funny AND dull, all at once.

Back to the drawing board.


Ann Finkelstein said...

Ooooooh. The next reincarnation, draft, idea will be a winner.

Mary Witzl said...

My heart goes out to you; this happens to me a lot too. I tell myself that the good news is that I have kids who are honest and discerning (sigh). My kids talk about story arcs, characterization, and obvious plot devices. I wish they wouldn't, really.

cath c said...

i discovered a long time ago, i can't trust my own kids for critique on my writing.

although i printed up a couple of copies of my ms just before the boys left for their dad's and my eldest, said, 'oh, i am definitely bringing THIS!' as he grabbed one made me giddy. then i promptly grabbed it back and told him he could read it here, when he returns.

Jacqui said...

cath c, that is sweet. I hope Tink still is willing to read my writing when she's older.

Mary, I know. Honest and discerning is better. It was the "it's so bad I'll just sit here and say nothing" that got me.

Ann, is that a prophesy? I hope you're right.

Corey Schwartz said...

Oh,ha! Could it be she just was in a bad mood?

My daughter used to tell me she didn't like Hop! Plop! because it didn't have enough characters, but I think she was just exerting her power :)